Please forgive my pedantry. I genuinely feel bad about this, especially considering the extent to which you've overcome dyslexia. If we're going to pick the target resolution up on its writing, however, we do need to be on point ourselves. Can't really track changes on this forum so I've tried a minor rewrite, adding in the point you made re the oil spillage resolution being overly specific and reordering the clauses to tackle the clauses of the target in order.
The General Assembly,
Applauding continued efforts to protect the environment and ensure sustainable development for future generations,
Affirming that the availability of fresh water is certainly an international concern worthy of the World Assembly,
Praising the intent, if not the content, of the target resolution Convention on Freshwater Shortages,
Nevertheless noting that the target resolution suffers from numerous problems,
Confused by the optional nature of clause 3. b, concerning regular inspection and maintenance of pipework, which renders the resolution useless for the purposes of conserving, and preventing the pollution of, fresh water,
Noting that while clause 4 mandates that nations “educate the public,” no outcomes are specified, enabling extremely lacklustre measures to satisfy the resolution,
Concerned that in an entire resolution on freshwater shortages only two clauses are mandatory, and that since one deals with the dumping of chemicals in ocean waters, and the other with public education (with the shortcomings noted above), neither of them have a significant impact on said shortages,
Believing that urging specific practices on all nations in clause 5 fails to take account of both the diverse biomes occupied by member nations, and of new technology developed while the resolution is in force, and that it would be more effective to ask them to employ evidence based measures suited to their particular circumstances,
Aware that the imprecise wording of clause 6 does not prohibit private individuals or non-profit subsidiaries from fouling water sources,
Additionally concerned that numerous errors in the writing throughout the resolution, such as clause 6’s “nations or any businesses contained wherein”, make the letter of the resolution difficult to interpret,
Hereby repeals GA #441 Convention on Freshwater Shortages.